Sunday 19 March 2017

Fantastic Voyage: Body Cells - The Green Section


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  1. Hi Polly - okay - see below. I did think that your poem was repetitive towards the end, so I've condensed things here a bit - for example, once you established that a glitching cell is malfunctioning, it's obvious you're talking about cancer, so you can get right too it. I took the section out about the various proteins - because you give this information, but then don't refer to it again in terms of the subject of cancer - it seems that the main point is the teleomere etc. That said, the voice-over shouldn't simply be repeating what's on the screen - so you can use text within the animation itself to put in some of the additional science - as long you find a good way to integrate it etc. I took the liberty of using the term 'glitch' in the voice-over, as it will make sense of your visual concept looking a certain way (that is if this is still a direction you're going in). If you need more content or there's stuff you want back in, just take a look at the rhyming scheme below and have a bash at getting it down.

    Poem...

    In our bodies, our cells total trillions. They multiply keeping us strong.
    They divide, and most do this perfectly, but sometimes a cell can go wrong.

    A cell, at its core, contains chromosomes – and as humans we have forty-six
    And new cells must mirror this number - by adding no more - or no less - to the mix.

    Our DNA is squished into chromosomes - an entire two metres in fact!
    DNA tells the cell how to function – what it’s for, what it does, how it acts.

    But cells can’t divide ad infinitum – they have a limit – their teleomere,
    Which gets shorter with each new division and thus signals an ending is near.

    With its teleomere gone, the cell knows to die – you might say “Off goes its switch!”
    But sometimes a cell decides otherwise, producing a protein that triggers a glitch.

    You see, cancer cells never just call it a day. Cancer cells divide more and more.
    And not content with just making tumors, they have a habit of going off to explore.

    Chemotherapy interrupts their division. Chemotherapy hurts parts of their cell.
    Chemotherapy targets the glitch and erases it all being well.

    Where you've got the bit about the cancer going off 'to explore' - you can give the term on screen and you can also show it entering the lymph system, which you label as such - I thought you could do a lot visually to accompany the voice-over, as opposed to the voice-over doing all the work.

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